IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 7

Many businesses choose to recruit from within their own company rather than sourcing staff overseas. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
A number of businesses choose to hire local
staff
Use synonyms
instead
Linking Words
 of international denizens’.
Although
Linking Words
 it leads to lack of skilled workers, its positive side, owing to easily adapt the local work environment and less salary to the
employees
Use synonyms
, overshadows the negative side. The aforementioned development leads to a shortage of highly skilled
employees
Use synonyms
. The reason behind
this
Linking Words
 is that foreign pupils have better professional and social skills because of their better education system and they are highly trained with advanced technology to done the smart work as compared to their own firm individuals.
Consequently
Linking Words
, it will adversely affect the image of the company all over the world. Despite the above-mentioned demerit, it will be convenient for the local members to settle in the company. Since
employees
Use synonyms
 are working for a long time in the same organization, they know about their clients, workplace policies ,and visions as well. It would be easy for them to catch up with other colleagues and learn about other skills required to achieve the goals because of their native language, thereby, it will be more productive for the businesses. A survey, done by Cambridge University students in 2018, revealed that the productivity of businesses hiked by 20%, who recruited their own
staff
Use synonyms
instead
Linking Words
 of abroad talent.
Moreover
Linking Words
, there is no need for extra wages and facilities for the local
employees
Use synonyms
.
This
Linking Words
 is because the overseas
employees
Use synonyms
 would need various amenities
such
Linking Words
 as travel expenses, accommodation, food, more salary because of their abilities ,and so on, which is not applicable for their own
staff
Use synonyms
 members. Resultantly, it will help to save money and can be spent on recruiting more
employees
Use synonyms
.
For instance
Linking Words
, Had Amit, one of my friends, would not hire 10 international
employees
Use synonyms
last
Linking Words
 year, he would save the salary of 5 more local
staff
Use synonyms
 members. To conclude, hiring highly skilled workers is less significant in front of the productivity and profit of the company.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: