Young people are much more aware of and concerned about issues like the environment, poverty, and animal welfare than previous generations. What is your opinion?

Some prospects believe that
eco-friendly
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lifestyle with
the
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concerns regarding
the
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income disparity and animal well-being
are
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at the heart of
this
generation
's attention while others detect no change in prioritizing social issues between different age groups of people. To my belief, I
am unequivocally agree
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with the former perspective as the prosperity of liberal values -
such
as the non-
anthropologistic
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anthropologists
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stance,
right
and
freedom
- were only
withnessed
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witnessed
witnesses
at the eminence of
2000s
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.
Previous
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generation
was struggling with incessant wars and nation-building projects. Appreciation of equality between the rich and the
poors
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poor
, human and nature or animal were not incorporated into the leading policy of any countries: The expansion and
stregthening
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strengthening
of the nations were the dominating
theme
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during that period.
Anthrocentric
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Anthropocentric
and
patriocentric
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pericentric
were the common key ideologies adopted in the old world as if they were the monoculture for people of that
generation
. Liberal ideology began to flourish after the worldwide conflicts had subsided following the Cold War in 1999. Once the pressing issue was removed from the table, governments and their population eventually gained the luxury to consider the welfare of people,
environment
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and animals. These thinkings became mainstream owing to the upholding of the value of
right
and
freedom
.
Initial
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concern with
right
and
freedom
has gradually embedded into the social norms and
expended
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into a vast scope. The poor, non-human species and ecosystem were given
right
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and
freedom
to be taken care of and be free from invasive exploitation. In conclusion,
this
generation
has upheld the liberal values
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concerning
about
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the
right
and
freedom
of fellow humans, animals and environments; the trend of the scale that has not observed precedently in
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human history.
Therefore
, it is not an exaggeration to regard these values as the current monoculture uniquely to
this
generation
.
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