Fashion trends are difficult to follow these days and it’s widely believed that they primarily exist just to sell clothes. Some people believe that we shouldn’t follow them and that we should dress in what we like and feel comfortable in. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays Fashion is something
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that everyone wants to embrace. It is a common belief that fashion trends predominantly exist just to sour up consumerism of trendy
clothes
,
besides
some individuals believe that our appearance should be based on our preferences of wearing
clothes
.I totally agree with the writer’s notion and the reasons behind my inclination are articulated in the subsequent paragraphs. To commence with, there are myriad of reasons which indicate that masses should not blindly follow latest trends and wear what suits
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themselves.
Firstly
, individuals should only wear what describe their personalities regardless
trends
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is
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not obvious that trendy fashionable
clothes
look good on them.
Secondly
, some people work in
corporate
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world , where their appearance matter a lot so for
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latest
clothings
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do not mean because it
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pompous.
Furthermore
, it is indeed
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that the latest trending
clothes
are costly that’s why the ordinary people can’t afford them that’s why they don’t prefer to attire them.
For instance
, nowadays brands like
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, puma and Adidas
are sell
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their products at
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cost
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which is not affordable for everyone.
However
,
latest
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fashionable
clothes
are trendy but it is undeniable fact that they are making with quality materials
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are very
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and could not be torn easily.
Moreover
, youngsters are more into latest wear so that they only tend to wear latest
clothes
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weather
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they suit on them or don’t they don’t care. In conclusion,
although
it is true that
latest
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products are only meant to rise
sells
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and fame of the company
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it is a personal choice what to wear and what not
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regardless; price,quality and material.
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