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‘Everybody should donate a fixed amount of their income to support charity.’ How far do you share this viewpoint?

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Supporting
charity
 is regarded as a valuable contribution to
the
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society.
However
, it is
debatable
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a debatable
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 topic whether or not a steady
amount
 of
money
 should be donated to
charity
. From my point of view, I strongly disagree with
this
 opinion, and I will explain why in
this
 essay.
Firstly
, the
income
 levels of people are different. For those low incomers to donate a fixed
amount
 of their
income
 to support
charity
 is not an easy task.
For example
, for some
are
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who are
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 living on their budget, they
are not be
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are not
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 able to give a donation of
money
 from their salary when they are
endeavoring
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 to make ends meet. A
second
 negative factor is
imperfect
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an imperfect
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 organization of
charities
. It tends to be unclear that how many
charities
 would be supported, how much
money
 would be donated, and when
such
 donations would take place etc. Some
argues
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 that
charity
 may not benefit the needy. It is true that there are some positives to support
charity
, they think that
charity
 is always good for society and everyone should hand over a fixed
amount
 of
income
 to
charity
 activities. Despite
this
, it seems that low incomers to give out donation
money
 from their
income
 is an issue
which
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that
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 can cause
economic
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 burden to them. To conclude
this
, the different
income
 levels of people and imperfect organization of
charities
 are the main reasons for disagreement of donating a fixed
amount
 of
income
 to support
charity
. Overall,
charities
 should be supported by those who
has
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 sufficient
income
 or the rich and donation
money
 should benefit the needy.
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