Some people believe that it is the responsibility of individuals to take care of their own health and diet. Others however believe that governments should make sure that their citizens have a healthy diet.
It is true that having
healthy
body is important in life, Add an article
a healthy
people
must take care their
own Change preposition
of their
body
. It is commonly asserted that it has to look after Fix the agreement mistake
bodies
people’s
healthy by the government
. I personally believe that there are evidences
to justify Change the wording
evidence
pieces of evidence
shreds of evidence
this
view.
First
and most obviously, individual take care of the health
and diet
is our own responsibilities, we have to take exercises to improve or
Correct your spelling
our
health
. In fact, control our diet
and change lifestyle, these are depends
to our actions and effort. Change the verb form
depend
For example
, the managing or change our the
current weight and lifestyle,Correct article usage
apply
them
need to control Change the pronoun
their
their
Correct pronoun usage
our
diet
and stop eat
unhealthy food. Even though, there are many programs and the experts in sphere Change the form of the verb
eating
nutrition
the illustrate how to be Change preposition
of nutrition
health
, Replace the word
healthy
at
the end all the time it depends on Change preposition
in
people
make it possible or impossible.
Secondly
, although
the government
must look after people’s
diet
and health
, people
can not be as much healthy as claimed. It is more likely to everyone is not equal in real life, salaries and people
are different between
each other. Change preposition
from
For example
, if someone can have natural and organic food while other people
cannot have it and one of the reason
is lack of money in Fix the agreement mistake
reasons
people
.
Finally
, even if people’s
health
can not be control by the government
, government
Add an article
the government
also
have obligation to look after the well-being of their citizens. When people’s
importance
to take responsibility our own Replace the word
important
health
, the government
have to make arguments, necessary background and motivate them toward the goal. For example
, building sport
Change the noun form
sports
centers
, gyms, swimming pools, Change the spelling
centres
center
with nutrition experts and e.t.c.
In conclusion, Fix the agreement mistake
centers
although
being healthy is solely depend
on Replace the word
dependent
people’s
actions, also
the government
can help their citizens to be health
by providing free experts on the Replace the word
healthy
diet
and support from financial status,
so that they justify to use them in their efforts to be healthy.Remove the comma
apply
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