Some people believe that it is the responsibility of individuals to take care of their own health and diet. Others however believe that governments should make sure that their citizens have a healthy diet.

It is true that having
healthy
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body is important in life,
people
must take care
their
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own
body
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. It is commonly asserted that it has to look after
people’s
healthy by the
government
. I personally believe that there are
evidences
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to justify
this
view.
First
and most obviously, individual take care of the
health
and
diet
is our own responsibilities, we have to take exercises to improve
or
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health
. In fact, control our
diet
and change lifestyle, these
are depends
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to our actions and effort.
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the
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current weight and lifestyle,
them
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need to control
their
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diet
and stop
eat
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unhealthy food. Even though, there are many programs and the experts in sphere
nutrition
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the illustrate how to be
health
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,
at
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the end all the time it depends on
people
make it possible or impossible.
Secondly
,
although
the
government
must look after
people’s
diet
and
health
,
people
can not be as much healthy as claimed. It is more likely to everyone is not equal in real life, salaries and
people
are different
between
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each other.
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, if someone can have natural and organic food while other
people
cannot have it and one of the
reason
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is lack of money in
people
.
Finally
, even if
people’s
health
can not be control by the
government
,
government
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also
have obligation to look after the well-being of their citizens. When
people’s
importance
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to take responsibility our own
health
, the
government
have to make arguments, necessary background and motivate them toward the goal.
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centers
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, gyms, swimming pools,
center
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with nutrition experts and e.t.c. In conclusion,
although
being healthy is solely
depend
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on
people’s
actions,
also
the
government
can help their citizens to be
health
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healthy
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by providing free experts on the
diet
and support from financial status
,
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so that they justify to use them in their efforts to be healthy.
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