Some people believe that it is the responsibility of individuals to take care of their own health and diet. Others however believe that governments should make sure that their citizens have a healthy diet.

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body is important in life,

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. It is commonly asserted that it has to look after

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healthy by the

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. I personally believe that there are

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to justify

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and most obviously, individual take care of the

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and

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is our own responsibilities, we have to take exercises to improve

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. In fact, control our

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and change lifestyle, these

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to our actions and effort.

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current weight and lifestyle,

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need to control

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and stop

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unhealthy food. Even though, there are many programs and the experts in sphere

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the end all the time it depends on

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make it possible or impossible.

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and

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,

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can not be as much healthy as claimed. It is more likely to everyone is not equal in real life, salaries and

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are different

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each other.

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, if someone can have natural and organic food while other

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cannot have it and one of the

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is lack of money in

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can not be control by the

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have obligation to look after the well-being of their citizens. When

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to take responsibility our own

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have to make arguments, necessary background and motivate them toward the goal.

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with nutrition experts and e.t.c. In conclusion,

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being healthy is solely

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on

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actions,

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the

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can help their citizens to be

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health

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by providing free experts on the

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and support from financial status

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so that they justify to use them in their efforts to be healthy.