Success is often measured in wealth and material belongings. Does wealth measure success? What makes a successful person?
It is believed that money and materialistic belongings are the parameters to measure
one
's success
.
Wealth
should be one
of the parameters to measure one
's success
but in today's world wealth
is the only parameter to judge one
's success
in society. For example
, if one
has a good house in downtown
area, big and luxurious cars along with a fixed source of income Correct article usage
the downtown
then
they will be called successful socially. On the other hand
, if one
has limited resources they will not be seen as successful individuals irrespective of the fact that if they are satisfied with what they have achieved so far. Hence
, for societ
, Correct your spelling
society
success
is one
's wealth
and assets but for any individual, it is a state of mind and being satisfied with what they have.
I believe good health
makes a person successful, there is saying
Correct article usage
a saying
health
is wealth
and I think that is
true for each of us. If an individual is salubrious then
he can achieve success
in any field of life. For example
, in a survey conducted by The Times magazine, around 40 percent
of the wealthiest people suffer from obesity and sleeping disorders. So for me, Change the spelling
per cent
one
is successful if they are physically and mentally fit and have balanced
life, with good work-Correct article usage
a balanced
lifelife
balance and if Correct your spelling
life life
life-life
they
time for their family as well as time or themselves. Correct your spelling
the
Thus
, good health
, and a happy family along with a constance
source of income is a true Correct your spelling
constant
Constance
success
because money is equally important to be happy and successful.
To conclude, i
would say Change the capitalization
I
health
is wealth
and success
should not be measured with one
's assets and wealth
but it should be measured with one
's quality of life and sense of satisfaction.Submitted by mayur.gupta44 on
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