IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 5

Success is often measured in wealth and material belongings. Does wealth measure success? What makes a successful person?

#success #wealth #belongings #measure #person
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
It is believed that money and materialistic belongings are the parameters to measure
one
Use synonyms
's
success
Use synonyms
.
Wealth
Use synonyms
 should be
one
Use synonyms
 of the parameters to measure
one
Use synonyms
's
success
Use synonyms
 but in today's world
wealth
Use synonyms
 is the only parameter to judge
one
Use synonyms
's
success
Use synonyms
 in society.
For example
Linking Words
, if
one
Use synonyms
 has a good house in
downtown
Correct article usage
the downtown
show examples
 area, big and luxurious cars along with a fixed source of income
then
Linking Words
 they will be called successful socially.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, if
one
Use synonyms
 has limited resources they will not be seen as successful individuals irrespective of the fact that if they are satisfied with what they have achieved so far.
Hence
Linking Words
, for
societ
Correct your spelling
society
,
success
Use synonyms
 is
one
Use synonyms
's
wealth
Use synonyms
 and assets but for any individual, it is a state of mind and being satisfied with what they have. I believe good
health
Use synonyms
 makes a person successful, there is
saying
Correct article usage
a saying
show examples
health
Use synonyms
 is
wealth
Use synonyms
 and I think
that is
Linking Words
 true for each of us. If an individual is salubrious
then
Linking Words
 he can achieve
success
Use synonyms
 in any field of life.
For example
Linking Words
, in a survey conducted by The Times magazine, around 40
percent
Change the spelling
per cent
show examples
 of the wealthiest people suffer from obesity and sleeping disorders. So for me,
one
Use synonyms
 is successful if they are physically and mentally fit and have
balanced
Correct article usage
a balanced
show examples
 life, with good work-
lifelife
Correct your spelling
life life
life-life
 balance and if
they
Correct your spelling
the
show examples
 time for their family as well as time or themselves.
Thus
Linking Words
, good
health
Use synonyms
, and a happy family along with a
constance
Correct your spelling
constant
Constance
 source of income is a true
success
Use synonyms
 because money is equally important to be happy and successful. To conclude,
i
Change the capitalization
I
show examples
 would say
health
Use synonyms
 is
wealth
Use synonyms
 and
success
Use synonyms
 should not be measured with
one
Use synonyms
's assets and
wealth
Use synonyms
 but it should be measured with
one
Use synonyms
's quality of life and sense of satisfaction.
Submitted by mayur.gupta44 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: