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As countries develop, population tend to live by themselves, what are its causes? What effect dose it have on the social?

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In recent years, more and more
people
 tend to live by themselves is a good signal that the life quality of the population in a country is increasing since poor residents do not have
this
 chance. In my opinion, living alone has both advantages and disadvantages. There are various reasons that motivated individuals to live alone.
First
,
people
 start to consider more about the privacy of an individual, which they do not want his or her family to involve.
Second
, different family members may work in different places or cities, living separately but near to their workplaces can reduce time-consumption on their way to work.
Last
 but not least, individuals who live alone can have more freedom to in charge of their leisure times
instead
 of being interrupted by others,
such
 as their sleeping timetable. Roughly speaking, the life qualities of one-person households are better than others, which means that the happiness level of societies is higher.
However
, some negative effects will occur at the same time. As the increasing number of one-person households, the probability of elderly citizens living alone will
also
 increase.
This
 will challenge societies and their development because elderly
people
 are inconvenient to finish housework by themselves, and some may even hard to take medical services on time when they get sick.
In addition
,
people
 who live alone lack
of
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daily conversation and emotional support from their family or flatmates. They may easy to get stuck in a frustrating situation and without any help at home. Seriously, some of them may have mental disorders or unhealthy lifestyles like taking drugs and drinking.
This
 will
also
 impact the development of societies. In conclusion, one-person households have better life qualities. And there are some detrimental effects that we should take care of.
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