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Safety standards are important when building people's homes. Who should be responsible for enforcing strict building codes – the government or the people who build the homes? intro : safety home natural disaster, florida building , money ,human loss , india inspection natural disaster con: govt more but ind too

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Nowadays,
safety
 has been regarded as a prominent part of an individual's life.
People
 want to stay safe and protect their families, where ever they live. Whether it is the
government
's obligation or individuals duty to enforce strict codes for the
safety
 of the building, are a highly debatable issue. In
this
 essay, I will discuss the deleterious effects of
this
 topic and provide supporting arguments for it. To commence with, the
safety
 of the
people
 of our nation is very important because it helps to reduce the fear of natural mishappening.
For instance
, while constructing a building or home, if
safety
 measures have not been taken
then
, there are high chances of the building getting collapsed. As a consequence will lose both money and
people
.
In addition
,
people
 will not be able to trust the same builder or the
government
.
Furthermore
, home inspection helps us to lessen the fear of accidents
such
 as roof fall, fire accidents.
For example
, a few days back, a high rise building got to collapse in Florida and at the time of collapse many
people
 were there
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the building and still,
government
 workers are in search of
people
 where many residents of the building found dead.
Moreover
, it has been seen that many houses get collapsed during the flood in all over the world. To put it in a nutshell, I pen down saying that,
although
 many
people
 vary their point of view on the topic, I wholeheartedly believe, it is the
government
's responsibility to provide home inspection at the time of construction and keep their country's
people
 safe. I would like to mention that still in a number of countries, inspection is very costly, so
government
 should try to make it free for everyone,
hence
 many
people
 can get benefits from it.
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