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It is often said that it is not necessary to have a tertiary education to become a successful businessman. To what extent to you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your opinion and relevant examples.

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Some people argue that it is not important to attend high school to be an important businessman. I completely agree with
this
 opinion and I think that be able to manage a company not need a
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 education.
First
 of all, I strongly believe that the main factor of success for a society is the ability of the owner to introduce on the market a revolutionary good. Thank
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the development of new products is possible to earn a lot of money because producing in a condition of monopoly permit to the society to make profits because they have not
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 on the market. To
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instance
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, Elon musk founder of Tesla
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 not have the competences to create electric cars but thanks to
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vision
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 and with the support of many experts created one of the biggest business in the world.
Secondly
, another important aspect is to have not afraid to do mistakes. One of the
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 that have in common famous
enteprenours
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entrepreneurs
 is that they failed during their life. Despite
this
, they were able to learn from their errors and to be more motivated to reach their goals.
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, a famous
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 businessman named Flavio Briatore
first
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to become an important person have failed many times in the course of his career but while
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 would have renounced to follow their dreams he never gave up
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 after a lot of years the success. To conclude, I deeply sustain that even if studying is important to have a good work career, braveness and new
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 can allow people to become famous and rich
enterprenours
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entrepreneurs
.
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