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advantage and disadvantage of telling children that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough.

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convincing
children
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 that hard
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 can fulfil everything they want is popular in some nations.
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message
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 has a powerful impact to encourage them and motivating them to pursue their goals.
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, it might be the main cause for their sadness, their depression and their loneliness. On the one hand, it is really beneficial to tell
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message
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 for the young generation as it is considered as a kind of encouragement
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 to push them to follow their dreams.
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, when
children
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 believe that they have to
work
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 hard to reach their goals, they understand that nothing will achieve easy, and they should make a vast effort to have what they deserve.
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,
this
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message
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 tells
children
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 that they may encounter various challenges to achieve what they desired, so that they have to try again and again, and after a long journey of ups and downs they will touch their success.
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,
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 may lead to a negative impact on
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 lives when
children
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 imagine that they can achieve what they want if they have strong persistence.
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,
children
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 may have unrealistic targets in their minds.
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, they may have a plan to be millionaires at the age of eighteen, and it is most of the time impossible.
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,
children
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 may
work
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 hard and do their best, but they don'
t
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 achieve their purposes. some students,
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, study all the time to be the top students in their class but they don'
t
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 fulfil what they want. and
this
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 is because their capabilities are limited ,and
this
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 is a normal situation.
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 will make them feel sad, disappointed and isolated in the worst case. to conclude, it is extremely positive and good to motivate youth by telling them that they can achieve what they want if they
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 hard, but
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 have an awful impact if they
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 hard and they don'
t
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 reach their ambition. so that, it is really much more beneficial if they understand that they may
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 hard ,but unfortunately, they don'
t
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 achieve their dreams because other people
deserve
Correct pronoun usage
itdeserve
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