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Band 7

Write a letter to your friend. You have borrowed something from your friend and it got damaged. 1. Apologise for damaging the product 2. Explain what happened 3. Say how you are going to fix the issue

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Dear Abhinav, Sorry, it's taken me so long to write to you but at
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, I put pen to paper to explain why I haven't returned the
book
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 I
brorrowed
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borrowed
 from you. To be honest, I've been feeling so guilty for delayed writing to you as I have to own up the
damaged
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 caused to your
book
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. I am really sorry as I know it was very important to you because it was passed on to you by your late father. What happened was that I was reading through the DIY about plumbing when I
accidently
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accidentally
 knocked over my cup of coffee that splashed all over the
book
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. Most of the damage is on the pages that were open. Anyway, I've sent it for repair. I was not aware that it
can
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 be fixed,
however
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, I searched on the internet and came across the solution. Most probably, it will be as good as new once I receive it in 5 days and later I'll send over the
book
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 to you. Again I'm so sorry for the delay in telling you. I hope you can forgive me. Best wishes, Rubina

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task achievement
You might consider adding a brief introduction to your letter that gives context about how much you value your friendship with Abhinav. This would enhance the personal touch.
coherence and cohesion
Try to vary your vocabulary a bit more to avoid repeating words like 'sorry' and 'damaged.' This would improve your expression and make it richer.
task achievement
Your apology and expression of guilt are heartfelt, which shows your sincerity and creates a good emotional connection.
coherence and cohesion
The structure of your letter is clear, with distinct paragraphs for different points, making it easy to follow.
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