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In many countries paying things using mobile phone apps is becoming increasingly common. Does this development have more advantages or more disadvantages?

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Mobile phone technology is growing very fast day by day. In developed countries
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 as the USA, Canada, and all European nations where the use of cell phones application for paying bills is very common. In the upcoming paragraphs
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I will discuss the merits of
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 invention.
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, the use of mobile makes our daily life very realistic and easy. Using the different applications, people can sell and borrow anything while they are at home.
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, In the pandemic time when every store is closed, the only way to do grocery, shopping and paying bills is done by cellular applications.
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, these applications provide paperless services. Masses don't have a need to collect letters, receipts for the bill they paid because of its reliability.
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, banking or any financial office send many letters. Sometimes they are misplaced or lost but using apps we store that e-statement in our phones and access them at any time.
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, these developments are very trustworthy provide end to end security authorization which makes people more comfortable while using. As we saw in every application there are two-way authentication factor policies that make the application more secure and vulnerable. To be concluded that no doubt
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 development is common but public taking many advantages like saving money in a way to going to shopping centre and paying the taxes which government should collect and use it for the development of the nation.
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