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Convenience foods will become increasingly prevalent and eventually replace traditional foods and methods of preparation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#convenience #foods #methods #preparation
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by advancing technologies, fast and packed cuisine has become the most popular way to eat meals and it is very widespread for modern society. It means that the public doesn't want to cook their meals. I completely disagree that
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 want to have easy
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 more and more.
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 of all, as times go by,
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 start to aware importance of the meal. In fact, nowadays
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 want to eat healthy cuisine, even though they know most
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 foods are not healthy
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 as fast
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 and frozen-packed meals from
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 stores.
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, traditional cooking is that normally used fresh ingredients and eat right after cooking, whereas
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 is cooked unknown ingredients. What's more, the nation thinks that authentic
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, which their parents cooked for them. It makes the family remind their memory.
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, they can remember their family.
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, Authentic
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 means representing each country's culture. The human being they always have been keeping their culture throughout history. It means the crowd want to preserve their traditional
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, some folk still cook their meal even if it takes so long and inconvenient.
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, some population think that fast cooking is not as delicious as traditional
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 because its tastes are very artificial,
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 most of the traditional
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's tastes are very natural.
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, folk often go to the restaurant for authentic and traditional. To conclude,
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 there will be a lot of fast foods and easy foods are produced more and more,
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 know what is healthy and beneficial for them.
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, they want to keep their identity.
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 cannot replace traditional
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