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Some people think that the internet has brought people closer together while others think that people and communities are become more isolated. Discuss both sides & give your opinion.

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Internet
 has become an essential service for
people
 across the world. Some
people
 think that
internet
 has made the world look smaller as they can talk to any person with a smart device in their hand.
While
 others think that it has separated
people
 inside community and from neighbours as
people
 stopping interacting even within the community physically. On one hand,
people
 think
internet
 has brought the
people
 together by reaching every nook and corner with the mobile device to share they joy, sarrow etc.
Whereas
, two decades back, the quickest means of reaching
people
 was telegram which would take time to reach
people
 based on the distance.
For example
: If one want to send money to his family he must go to bank to transfer the money to the beneficiary, but with the help of
internet
 it would be taken care in seconds now and
thus
 many feel that
internet
 has brought
people
 closer.
On the other hand
, though
people
 are expressing anger, anexity towards the incident they see over
internet
, they are aware of whats happening around them or social interaction has gone for a toss.
For example
: if we go bank, we talk to the clerk or teller and we would interact with them socially and get to know whats happening around us.
Whereas
 with the raise of
internet
, everything is happening over phone or computer and
people
 stopped interacting even with in the family and
hence
 lost the touch of social relationship which was one of best of human life. In my view, I would say as a human being we should embrace the technological advancements like
internet
 and make our life easier but not the cost of losing social relationship and interaction with neighbours.
Submitted by gikarthikeyan on

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Provide a clear and comprehensive analysis of both sides of the argument with relevant and specific examples to support your points.

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