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In the future, more people will choose to go on holidays in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

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Going on vacations is an integral part of
people
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's lives. So, going forward it is believed that many
people
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 will prefer to spend holidays in their own country as compared to
traveling
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travelling
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abroad
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aborad
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abroad
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.
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, I disagree with the statement and believe that
people
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 will continue going to international destinations due to numerous reasons explained in
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 of all,
people
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 will continue to
travel
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 abroad because it gives them a chance to explore and discover various foreign cultures and heritage. To add on,
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travel
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 to gain
awarness
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awareness
 of new customs, values, traditions, beliefs,
cusines
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cuisine
cuisines
 and places.
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, according to a recent survey conducted by
Trip
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the Trip
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 a majority of the holidaymakers or vacationers travelled to another destination so that, they could learn and experience the attributes of a different culture.
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 not only broadens their horizons but
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 helps them with their personal development, as they become culturally intelligent. For
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 vacationers with disposable will continue travelling abroad.
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, many tourists pick those destinations that are very different in characteristics from their home country.
This
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 means, that tourists who reside in warmer climates prefer to visit colder regions whereas, others who live in cold areas are fond of visiting tropical areas.
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, according to a study, a majority of the
people
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 who
travel
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 to areas
such
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 as Maldives,
Thiland
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Thailand
 or even Malaysia belong to cold countries like
Sibera
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Sierra
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 or Iceland.
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,
people
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 residing in these hot weathered countries
travel
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 to countries like Turkey or Nepal to experience
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a change
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 in temperature. In conclusion, Vacations are an essential part of our lives these days. I believe that
people
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 will continue to
travel
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 abroad for vacations as compared to staying in their own country because it provides
necessary
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 change in terms of climate and cultural experiences.
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