Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situations Such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money.others argue that is better to try and improve Such situations . Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

While some persons are of the opinion that it is better to accept an unpleasant situation
such
as an unsatisfactory
job
or low funds, others are of the suggestion, and I believe, that acquiring a skill can help enhance
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. On the one hand, due to the rising level of unemployment, some individuals claim that it is best to accept an unpleasant opportunity.
This
is because we have too many
people
after a limited number of
job
offers and for
this
reason, in Nigeria,
for example
, most graduates pick up jobs that do not have
comfortable
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workplace
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with low pay, just to stay off the unemployment space.
As a result
of the
increase
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need to get a
job
amongst many, some would argue that these prospective employees should accept whatever work they get.
However
, I do not agree
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this
claim as they should be compensated well for their efforts.
On the other hand
, skill acquisition has been proposed to help advert a situation whereby
people
go for low paid jobs. By learning different skills
such
as tailoring, soap making etc, these individuals are taught to be self-reliant and independent to enable them
cater
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for their daily needs. In a bid to ensure that
people
have enough financial resources to tackle their day-to-day expenses,
for instance
, the federal government of Nigeria trains
her
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new graduate to acquire
theses
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essential skills during their service year. By so doing,
people
would no longer be pressured to take up jobs that do not have a befitting pay and
condusive
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conducive
work environment. In conclusion, despite the fact that many are of the opinion that prospective employees should take up any
job
at
there
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disposal irrespective of the conditions surrounding it,
other
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suggest
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and I agree that individuals should be trained to be
self employed
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unsatisfactory
  • shortage
  • facilitating
  • personal growth
  • resilience
  • acknowledging one's limits
  • within one's control
  • actively seeking
  • professional development
  • circumstances
  • practical standpoint
  • coping mechanism
  • mental health
  • well-being
  • self-efficacy
  • entrepreneurship
  • obstacles
  • temporary solace
  • feasible option
  • striving for improvement
  • embodies
  • human spirit
  • thrive in adversity
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