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Some people think that the internet has brought people closer together while others think that people and communities are become more isolated. Discuss both sides & give your opinion.

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Airways are the modern form of transport for people to move from one place to another as it reduces time, money and energy.
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 certain group argue that airways are causing more air pollution than ever before but I strongly disagree with
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Firstly
, aeroplanes are not the predominant cause of air pollution.
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, think of it
this
 way, if people were forced to use roadways for moving thousands of miles
then
 imagine the cost of fuel and time wasted towards that.
Also
, imposing additional
cost
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 would lead to the usage of airways only by elites which would not be a great idea.
Moreover
,
increasing
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 duty would put significant stress on Indian tourism as individuals would prefer touring with other means of transport. Another reason why I disagree is that, if pollution is the problem, we need to resort to ways in which we could curb the environmental damage,
instead
 of imposing a charge on airfare.
For example
, now the government is promoting and giving
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 for electric and batter cars to reduce carbon footprint.
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, investment should be made more into the research of finding an alternate fuel for aircraft and thereby reducing the toxic in air and save the environment as well.
Finally
, the modern style of transport is causing some environmental problems but the solution would be to find an alternative way to overcome the issue with advanced technology and solutions. Raising the tax would eventually put a hole in common man's pocket and will put the country on the back foot rather than developing
further
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