Some people think that the internet has brought people closer together while others think that people and communities are become more isolated. Discuss both sides & give your opinion.
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have shown an Correct your spelling
decades
decades we
increasingly
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increasing
growth
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growing
the
communication applications which are mainly used over the internet. The usage of these applications, Correct article usage
apply
such
as Facebook, Twitter, Snapchat, ...and etc, make some people
much more
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closer
around the world, Replace the word
closely
in
contrast
make other Add the comma(s)
,contrast
people
seperated
. Correct your spelling
separated
this
essay will discuss both sides and introduce my point of view.
In
the one hand, the existence of the internet in our Change preposition
On
lives
, make people
easily exchange their news
around the world. For example
, if one has a special occasion, he can share
his party with his family and his friend even if they are live
in Replace the word
life
different
country. Add an article
a different
Thus
, it is clearly
how the internet has Replace the word
clear
make
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made
people
feel close together.
on the other hand
, it is popularly that people
tend to share
their news
, their special parties, and their interests with others
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other
people
who live away and who do not have any relation with them, but at the same time
they tend to keep Add a comma
,time
theselves
away from their neighbours or their Correct your spelling
themselves
relatives
. In other words
, they isolate their self
locally, Correct pronoun usage
themself
themselves
however
they do not mind Add a comma
,however
to
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sharing
share
their news
with anyone who are
outside their countries, cities, and Change the verb form
is
their
towns. I expect that because they do not want to allow anyone of their Correct pronoun usage
apply
relatives
to interfer
in their Correct your spelling
interfere
lives
, since the others can not affect on
their Change preposition
apply
lives
because they are already outside their home town.
In my opinion, I totally agree with the
both point of Remove the article
apply
views
, and Fix the agreement mistake
view
that is
because I have noticed that most of
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apply
the
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people
tend to hide their private lives
from their relatives
or their friends to protect their privacy. so most of the time, they keep themselves away from their neighbourhood, relatives
and friends. They, for instance
, virtually share
their updates with their family who live far away, but they do not prefer to share
the same updates with their close family, neighbours, or friends in real life. so the people
who are live part away feel they are close when they exchange their updates , in
contrast
the close Add the comma(s)
,contrast
people
feel isolated from each other when they do not takepart
in Correct your spelling
take part
relatives
' events inreal
life.
to conclude, sometimes, we can not understand Correct your spelling
in real
understand
why Remove the redundancy
apply
people
prefer sharing their news
with who
are Correct pronoun usage
those who
live
away from them, but they absolutely do not like sharing the same Change the form of the verb
living
newe
with other Correct your spelling
news
people
who are close to them, and they tend to isolate Correct your spelling
themselves
them selves
in local.Correct your spelling
themselves
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