Some people think that developments involving the Internet have brought people closer together while others think that people and communities have become more isolated. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Some
people
claim that internet
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the internet
become
insulate for humanity for some reasons Change the verb form
becomes
such
as play computer games, sit at home and so on, while other
think that Correct pronoun usage
others
this
is the ways
to be closer and communicate between Fix the agreement mistake
way
people
in
social networks. I believe that Change preposition
on
internet
can bring more plusses than necessary. In Correct article usage
the internet
this
essay
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i
will discuss both views and give my own opinion.
On the one hand, Change the capitalization
I
internet
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the internet
become
a part of us and Change the verb form
becomes
thise
is awesome but not always Correct your spelling
this
those
these
this
is good, cause of this
is insulating and misunderstanding the people
. What i
mean by Change the capitalization
I
this
is that people
start to live in the game and think as well as game
. Correct article usage
the game
For example
, Franch science Leonard conducted research and claim that if someone will play 5 hours alone during the week they will be collapsed and it will be hard for them to find a way to speak. After this
investigation
more parents start to think about Add a comma
,investigation
this
research and forbid to play
Change the verb form
playing
to
their children.
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with
On the other hand
, internet
is easy to communicate and appoint dates. Add an article
the internet
In other words
, we can connect with each other in apps such
as Telegram, Imo, Instagram and try to find comfortable
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a comfortable
time
to meet. Fix the agreement mistake
times
For instance
, i
use Telegram as Change the capitalization
I
subject
to speak and communicate with friends we always appoint Correct article usage
a subject
date
in Fix the agreement mistake
dates
this
app and than
meet with each other. It is one of the ways to use Replace the word
then
internet
.
In conclusion, Add an article
the internet
i
strongly believe that Change the capitalization
I
people
stop to play
games and start to think about life.Change the verb form
playing
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite