Nowadays, the way people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the type of relationship that people have? Has this become a positive or negative development?

In recent times, methods of interaction between individuals have been altered because of the advancement in
technology
and
this
has affected means of communication in a positive way.
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, technological
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advancement has made communication faster and easier. In the past,
for example
, messages were hand-written with paper and pen
,
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and sent through post offices to different parts of the world, and
this
was more stressful and would take days to weeks and sometimes months to get to the recipient. With the growth in
technology
,
this
has been made less stressful as thousands of messages can now be sent from the comfort of one's home by clicking a button on one's mobile device.
Additionally
,
technology
has turned the world into a small global village. It has enabled people
connect
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with other like-minded individuals across the globe. With the availability of phone
apppplications
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like
twitter
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Twitter

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,
linkedIn
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LinkedIn
Linkedin

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etc , people can now communicate with other persons from different parts of the world.
For instance
,
linkedIn
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LinkedIn
Linkedin

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is a popular social media platform where scholars from
same
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field meet with each other and discuss trending issues. Due to the fact that
this
helps to broaden one's communication beyond their immediate
surroundings
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it is a positive development. In conclusion, methods of social interaction
has
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changed over time due to developments in
technology
, and
this
is advantageous as it has helped to shorten the duration involved in sending and receiving
message
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the message
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, and
also
unite people with
same
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the same

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interest.
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