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Some people think that children should not watch television because it has negative effects, while others believe that televison helps children. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #children #television #effects #televison
Watching television is one of our daily basis since we started using it and every day there are more people that
has
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 a
TV
. A lot of people think that the dump box it doesn’t make any favour to their
children
 but
other family
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another family
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 can think
that is
 a way to spend more
time
 with their family. I am of the opinion that it has to be a balance.
First
 of
all
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 saying that in
this
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these
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days
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Tv
 has
became
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become
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 something bigger
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than
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that
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than
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 watching it in our living rooms, we carry our own
tv
 with our smartphones and tablets.
This
 means that we can watch
TV
 everywhere
in
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 the planet. In the present, is true that we may watch
to
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 much television and not only that, we spend our days in front of some type of screen.
This
 is not good for our
children
 because
its
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know
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knowledge
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 that they copy what they see.
For
example
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 if some parents spend all they watching stuff on the screen probably their kids will do the same. It has been proven that there is an addiction to
TV
,
this
 means that our
children
 may need some type of screen all the
time
 to be calm.
This days
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This day
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 we can see
children
 that won’t stop misbehaving until they don’t have something to watch.
On the other hand
, watching
TV
, even more now that we are in
situation
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a situation
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 that we have to spend a lot of
time
 in
house
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the house
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, can be a great way of spending more
time
 with the family while you have a nice dinner and enjoy a classic Disney movie.
Also
 is a way to teach kids things
for example
 when I was a kid I used to see
this
 documentary´s for kids about the human body. To sum up, I think that
TV
this
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is like a lot of things
of
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in
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 our lives that it is something good but an excess or bad use of it can transform it
in
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into
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 something bad.
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