The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. 

Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graphs depict the percentage of households owning
electron
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devices,
such
as washing
machine
, refrigerators and
vacuum
cleaner and their housework time in a particular country from 1920 and 2019.
Overall
, it can be seen that
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over the period as a whole the ownership of electrical appliances rose in all three categories.
On the contrary
, the amount of time spent on household chores declined in given years. In the year 1920, there was no household with
refrigerator
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a refrigerator
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,
while
30% of families had
vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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and 40% of them had
washing
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a washing
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machine
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machines
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. The number of
owners
of washing
machine
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machines
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and
vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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both increased by 20% during the
next
two decades,
whereas
families with
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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experienced a significant rise to around 55%. Despite some downward trend in washing
machine
owners
from 1960 to 1980, they all
then
followed a similar trend, increased steadily to 100% (refrigerator and
vacuum
cleaner
owners
) and about 74% (washing
machine
owners
). As given in the
second
chart, people spent 50
hours
per
week
on
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doing housework in 1920.
However
, the amount of housework dropped considerably to reach 20
hours
per
week
in 1960.
After
this
, it fall again in 1980, reaching approximately 15
hours
per
week
. Over the
next
two decades, the number of
hours
remained static, after which
this
figure decreased slightly to finish the period at around 11
hours
per
week
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "next".
Vocabulary: Replace the words machine, vacuum, owners, hours, week with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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