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In some countries, a few people eam extremely high salaries. Some people think that is good for a country, while others believe that the government should control salaries and limit the amount people can earn. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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 have tremendous incomes in different countries. Many human beings believe
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 is beneficial for countries,
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, some others believe that the State might control
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 income and provide an exact quantity of money for everyone. On the one hand, if
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 have control over salaries and limit the amount of money people can earn, will be equitative for everyone. All people having the same income will mean that
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, food prices or even rent prices stay equal every year and all of us may be economically peers.
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, social differences will not exist.
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, annually, all individuals have to pay
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 to the State.
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, these
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 have heightened for those who earn great amounts of money.
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 have been benefited from it, with these profits, they are allowed to maintain the cities, solve some of their economical woes, and
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, help the homeless. An excellent example of
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 could be the urban eateries for those who lived in the streets or in shelters; there they can have their three meals daily.
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 has been a marvellous initiative by the government. From my standpoint, I agree with the previous paragraph, since, we need those who have high salaries, in order to help
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 with their
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 and, due to the need of elevating competition that each individual could feel, so as to obtain the same or higher incomes. To conclude, heightens salaries are needed either to contribute to
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 to help those who need it the most or to have competition for ourselves.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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