Over the last few decades, the media has promoted the image of young thin women a being ideal. What problems has this caused? What solutions can you suggest to this issue?

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?

In the past few years, it has been seen that the youngest slim female is considered as an ideal in the industry of media. I will discuss the obstacles and giving a valid solution for

this

issue in the following paragraph. No doubt it is the foremost part of the model to look less fatty in the films or in the modelling. But it creates many obstacles for the obesity and unhealthy people who have a dream to be work as

a role models

Correct the article-noun agreement

a role model

role models

show examples

due to that many committed suicides and others go into depression.

Moreover

, some tend to become career-driven and developed many health-related eating disorders

such

as anorexia which make their body weak.

Furthermore

such

careers have a short shelf life and mostly the women crossing the age of 30 have a rare opportunity to find a job. One way to overcome

this

problem is to encourage the media to show realistic programs.

For instance

, movies that show women's like thin or younger

instead

present them as strong, independent and

an individual professionals

Correct the article-noun agreement

individual professionals

an individual professional

show examples

so that it inspires the generation more. For

this

, ladies like mother Teresa's is a powerful inspiring person. Another explanation is to do physical activities rather than more dieting. It is good to be health-conscious for that make a schedule which balances our body and put away us from committing any serious action against a life. To be concluded the media must aware the public that it is not necessary to be young and thin in order to be perfect. The thing matters more is that women should be educated and independent so that she will see its future in every field to get success and

also

bring change to settle in the society.

Submitted by mandeepsandhu7067 on Fri Jul 02 2021

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

7
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

0123456789.0505

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

289 words

🚀 Prepare for IELTS writing section today!

Unlimited Task 1 & Task 2 checks
Practice with essays, charts, and letters.
Personalized suggestions & mistake analysis
Spot every mistake and boost your score.
Topic ideas & vocabulary helpers
Expand your ideas and use the right words.
Progress tracking
Watch your writing improve with every practice.

Topic Vocabulary:

What to do next:

Look at other essays:

5
band
Social networking sites are beneficial on an individual level, but for a community as a whole, it does have a negative impact. Give your opinion.
Currently, social networking sites provide communication between people. From THE one hand, it is useful for one person and at the same time, it has a detrimental effect for the whole society. I definitely agree with this.
6
band
Nowadays environmental problems are too big to be managed by individual persons or individual countries. In other words, it is an international problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Climate change has become a major concern for the well-being of future generations. A group of thinkers supports that these environmental issues can not be tackled at the local level and the only option left to combat them is to address them globally. I partially agree with the notion and my inclination is discussed in the ensuing paragraphs with the pertinent examples.
8.5
band
You recently missed a flight. You think this was the airline’s fault. Write a letter to the airline. In your letter, •explain why u believe airline is at fault •describe the impact it had on your journey. •say what you want the airline to do
I hope this letter finds you well. I am writing regarding a flight I missed due to the negligence of your airline’s staff that I felt needed to be reported.
6.5
band
Doctors recommend that older people should excersice regularly.However many of them do not exercise enough. What are the causes? What can be done to encourage them to exercise?
The elderly are often getting a recommendation from doctors to maintain their health by exercising in a routine schedule. It was argued that regardless of the suggestions which came from doctors, the majority of them still didn't do enough physical activities. This essay will discuss what may be causing this situation and the suitable solution to deal with it.
5
band
Cyber insecurity is a rising problem in many countries. What problems does a lack of cyber security cause to Internet users? What solutions can you suggest to solve it?
In the modern era, the Internet has penetrated extensively in the diverse life’s spheres. Despite the fact that it has unequivocally assisted humans’ life, it is accompanied by paving the way of executing crime which threatens everybody’s privacy. This essay will express the consequences of the insecure environment of the Internet and propose the practical solutions for the sake of protection it against cyberattack.

Over the last few decades, the media has promoted the image of young thin women a being ideal. What problems has this caused? What solutions can you suggest to this issue?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Social networking sites are beneficial on an individual level, but for a community as a whole, it does have a negative impact. Give your opinion.

Nowadays environmental problems are too big to be managed by individual persons or individual countries. In other words, it is an international problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

You recently missed a flight. You think this was the airline’s fault. Write a letter to the airline. In your letter, •explain why u believe airline is at fault •describe the impact it had on your journey. •say what you want the airline to do

Doctors recommend that older people should excersice regularly.However many of them do not exercise enough. What are the causes? What can be done to encourage them to exercise?

Cyber insecurity is a rising problem in many countries. What problems does a lack of cyber security cause to Internet users? What solutions can you suggest to solve it?