People in all modern societies use drugs, but today's youth are experimenting with both legal and illegal drugs, and at an increasingly early age. Some sociologists claim that parents and other members of society often set a bad example. Discuss the causes and some effects of widespread drug use by young people in modern day society. Make any recommendations you feel are necessary to help fight youth drug abuse.

Many societies are suffering from addiction problems, particularly throughout their young population.
Although
crucial efforts have been made by
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authorities
, not only the severity of
this
pandemic has not decreased yet, the
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age of beginning illicit drugs dropping day by day. In my view, the major reasons
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matter are the lack of communication between parents and children and peer pressure. Particularly with the spreading social media influence,
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generation has had some wrong beliefs about illicit drug use,
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as supposing it provides a different heavenish world or peer acceptance. What is more, with
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puberty, as their communication with their caregivers diminishes, the one with their
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surges. If they are lack
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wiser companies,
such
as teachers or mature
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friends
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, they can make dangerous acts in their hard times.
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, a young person with problems in school grades or in adjusting to his friends may
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using some drugs for relief of intense feelings , and
therefore
he may transform into the
addictedindividual
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addicted individual
addicted individuals
of the future. In terms of solutions, as we experienced through the war between humankind and tobacco, enforcing people not to use these products would be resulted in only much more demand. Of
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governments and police should be one of the major preventive factors, by stopping the distribution of these drugs; yet, the fundamental force should be the youth themselves, who gained the
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about
this
matter , by education and improved interaction between their supporters. As the harms could be illustrated in young brains with examples that society has many they would agree in not trying these products. Another solution is to make children explore their
healthy
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interests for not to drawn with destructive options. In conclusion, the main
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reason
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illicit drug use are the wrong impression of youth from peers or some social platforms and unbinding from the families and
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advisors,
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the main strategy should be based on establishing unbroken ties with
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generation to save them throughout their vulnerable times.
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