Keeping animals in captivity is cruel. There is no reason for zoos to exist in the 21st century. How far do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Around the world,
people
have differing opinions about
zoos
. Some
people
believe that keeping
animals
in captivity is wrong, while others contend that it is necessary
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and that we need
zoos
. In
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I will explore both of these views, as they each have some merit, before drawing a conclusion. Proponents of
zoos
tend to argue that these places are intended to educate the public about
animals
. They claim that
people
can go to
zoos
and become more aware of serious environmental issues, and that
therefore
zoos
are essential in raising awareness of serious issues.
For example
,children can visit
zoos
and learn about
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majestic elephant, and
then
adapt their behaviour to become more responsible
people
in the future.
However
,
this
argument assumes that all
zoos
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education, when in fact many
zoos
are geared towards entertainment, and many
people
come away from a zoo visit having learned relatively little. Opponents of
zoos
claim that it is cruel to keep
animals
in captivity, and that
therefore
they belong in the wild. They point to numerous studies that show the suffering experienced by
animals
in even the best
zoos
. It is clear from
this
evidence that many large
animals
require extensive
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roam
that is
just not available for them in their artificial enclosures, and so they suffer serious psychological and even physical damage. The fact that
animals
almost always live shorter lives in
zoos
is
further
proof of
this
fact. In conclusion,
although
there are some good reasons for the existence of
zoos
, they probably should not be allowed to continue into the twenty-
first
century. Despite the positive efforts of some
zoos
, the suffering experienced by
animals
in captivity is simply unacceptable.
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