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Keeping animals in captivity is cruel. There is no reason for zoos to exist in the 21st century. How far do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Around the world,
people
 have differing opinions about
zoos
. Some
people
 believe that keeping
animals
 in captivity is wrong, while others contend that it is necessary
,
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 and that we need
zoos
. In
this
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 I will explore both of these views, as they each have some merit, before drawing a conclusion. Proponents of
zoos
 tend to argue that these places are intended to educate the public about
animals
. They claim that
people
 can go to
zoos
 and become more aware of serious environmental issues, and that
therefore
zoos
 are essential in raising awareness of serious issues.
For example
,children can visit
zoos
 and learn about
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majestic elephant, and
then
 adapt their behaviour to become more responsible
people
 in the future.
However
,
this
 argument assumes that all
zoos
 treat their purpose
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 education, when in fact many
zoos
 are geared towards entertainment, and many
people
 come away from a zoo visit having learned relatively little. Opponents of
zoos
 claim that it is cruel to keep
animals
 in captivity, and that
therefore
 they belong in the wild. They point to numerous studies that show the suffering experienced by
animals
 in even the best
zoos
. It is clear from
this
 evidence that many large
animals
 require extensive
spaceto
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space to
 roam
that is
 just not available for them in their artificial enclosures, and so they suffer serious psychological and even physical damage. The fact that
animals
 almost always live shorter lives in
zoos
 is
further
 proof of
this
 fact. In conclusion,
although
 there are some good reasons for the existence of
zoos
, they probably should not be allowed to continue into the twenty-
first
 century. Despite the positive efforts of some
zoos
, the suffering experienced by
animals
 in captivity is simply unacceptable.
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