You work for a company. You have seen some information online about a training course that would be useful for your work. Write a letter to your manager.
Dear Sir,
I am writing to inform you about a week-long course that would benefit my work at the Department of Software Development.
It is a seven-day intensive program offered by the State Information Technology and is scheduled to start on the 17th of
this
month.
The course is on the programming language: Java and I believe it would enhance my potential. I came to know that there are 10 new projects which are in the queue, and if I am updated with the language, I can provide expanded technical expertise.
As the training is full-time, I cannot attend the office during the period. Hence
, it would be greatly appreciated if you could avail me of a paid leave till the 26th of this
month. I believe my absence would not affect the normal functioning of the department, as most of my colleagues have agreed not to take leave during these days.
I look forward to hearing from you soon,
Yours sincerely,Submitted by ayseozzdemir on
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coherence and cohesion
In the second paragraph, replace 'It' with 'The course' for clarity.
task achievement
Change 'avail me of a paid leave' to 'grant me paid leave' for more natural phrasing.
task achievement
It might be helpful to briefly mention how the course content is directly relevant to the upcoming projects.
writing tone
The letter maintains a professional and courteous tone throughout.
single idea per paragraph
Each paragraph introduces a single, clear idea, contributing to the overall coherence.