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Write a letter to your friend regarding a few things need to bring from your home

#friend #home
I hope
this
 letter finds you well. I am so glad that you are coming to Vancouver next week, as it seems ages since we
last
 saw each other. I actually have a favour to ask you hope you don't mind.The fact that
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 need
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 things from my home and
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 would be extremely grateful if you could
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along with
 your luggage. I believe you are
customer-service
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 Manager of
tech
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 mobile store in Burnaby city, and so I am writing to complain about a smart mobile which
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 bought from your store on 10th March 2015.
Although
 I followed corrective actions in the user manual, still I
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 an issue with the mobile back camera as I could not capture any picture, which means it
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 not fit our purpose. I have sent multiple emails and tried to connect with the service team over the phone but nobody could take ownership of my issue. Would you kindly reply in the mail by writing
return
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 confirmation of full refund money and collection of my mobile with anticipating dates
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 Newspaper: Dear Editor, I am writing
this
 letter to let you know
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 cancellation of
current
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year
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 football competition and we are extremely sad to inform
to
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our public through your new paper. The fact that the current financial status is not so good and we do have some unavoidable factors which made us cancel the football matches.
on the other hand
, there are many
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youngsters who actively looking for the event and hope we will plan for next year.
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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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