Being a celebrity - such as famous film star or sports personality - brings problems as well as benefits. Do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems.

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Nowadays, there are many
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who dream of becoming a well-known figure in their society. While
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will bring fame and prosperity for
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, others
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, including me, assert that being a celebrity have the
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potential
to cause misery and privacy invasion for famous
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individuals
. On the one hand, a group of
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people
opines that popularity has several
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disadvantages
for famous
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.
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,
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people
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do not have control over their personal life since
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photographers
and
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reporters
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try to pry into the affairs of their personal lives.
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, most
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celebrities
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the celebrities
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,
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as film stars and football
palyers
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players
, claim that they are disturbed by media while having
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dinner or browsing in
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shopping
malls.
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, they allege that there some individuals who disseminate
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rumours
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social media by posting false news and information so
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distinguished figures are likely to respond to the
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criticisms
that
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arise
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rumours
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, being a well-known celebrity brings nothing but misery since famous
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are not able to enjoy their privacy and popularity
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, many
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believe that fame can provide celebrities with wealth and comfort.
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is mainly because
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individuals are paid
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a substantial salaries
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a substantial salary
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for acting in movies or
palying
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playing
in games.
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, what
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people
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fail to see is that the lifespan of
pouplarity
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popularity
is short in many cases since there is
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that
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the public
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lsoe
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lose
their interest after a while.
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,
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fate is not true for some actors or
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actresses
actors
, because they might receive public attention for the whole of their lives. In conclusion,
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school
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of thought claims that being a celebrity will bring fortune and fame for renewed
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, I contend that
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will bring about difficulties since famous
people
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are annoyed by media and public invasion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Public scrutiny
  • Intrusive
  • Endorsements
  • Sponsorships
  • Financial security
  • High-profile collaborations
  • Social influence
  • Philanthropic efforts
  • Trust issues
  • Mental health challenges
  • Substance abuse
  • Pressures of celebrity
  • Expectations
  • Disconnect from reality
  • Normalcy
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