Families who send their children to private schools should not be required to pay taxes that support the state education system. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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Many parents think that private schools should be free and do not need to support with
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of education. To a certain
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I agree that families should not pay taxes for academy
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, I
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think that private
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should have
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to keep
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, poor families do not have enough
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academy and free
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way to keep parents'
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, students get the greatest education from the
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which improve successfully their mind.
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,
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have a motivation to study much more at the best
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. Another reason why I agree with
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students' career.
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prestige to pass the exam to the great university.
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, there is an argument that private
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cannot keep and educate usefully their
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. The reason that
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is income which helps to educate their students and maintain a building.
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,
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and staff of workers should gain
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to work with ambition and interest at
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private
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, because if they do not get
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for their job
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teachers and administration do not want to have
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lessons. For the reasons mentioned above, I believe that families should not spend
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education
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of private
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school
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schools
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, but parents should understand that private
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school
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schools
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are without any payments will have problems with educating
pupils
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • tax exemption
  • public education
  • private schools
  • collective responsibility
  • societal welfare
  • equitable access
  • financial burden
  • social cohesion
  • tax credits
  • vouchers
  • subsidies
  • state-funded
  • socioeconomic disparities
  • public vs. private sector
  • quality of education
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