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some people believe that rich countries should provide poorer countires with other types of help rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #countries #countires #aid
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In recent years, there are significant differences between rich
countries
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 and poorer
countries
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. Comparing to economic aid, some
people
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 think it's more useful that rich
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 provide other types of help (education, employment, medicine etc) for poorer
countries
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 . In the following essay, I will publish my opinion and elaborate on it.
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, it's true that financial aid could improve the development of the local economy, but if rich governments always donate money for poorer
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,
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 from poorer
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 will depend on rich governments, they have no independent power of production.
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, it grows a bad habitat for poorer
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, local
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 wouldn't do work and study. Naturally, these
areas
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 will worse and worse so that they go to extinction.
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, rich
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 could construct some infrastructures for poorer
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, like schools, hospitals, apartments etc. Education plays an important role in a developing country, it can impart advanced knowledge and technology for
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-generation, when these
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 grow up, they will boost their country to be stronger. What's more, hospitals can reduce disease, it improves the quality of medicine and makes more
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 have a healthier body so that built their country. In conclusion, rich
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 can donate some money in a way, it only remissions problems for a small time, improving other aspects are more important.
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