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The charts below give information about the typical temperatures in London, New York, and Sydney as well as total hours of sunshine for each city.

The charts below give information about the typical temperatures in London, New York, and Sydney as well as total hours of sunshine for each city.
#information #temperatures #london #york #sydney #hours #sunshine #city
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illustrate
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London
New-York
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New York
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 and
Sydney
 as a city
with
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showing the total monthly temperatures and during the year they find
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an ovarage
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ovarage
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average
 number of hours of sunshine. There are
graphline
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graphing
graph line
 and table with annual hours for three
country
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countries
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. In
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the graph
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graph
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 we can see that
London
 and
New-York
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New York
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starts
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 with small numbers and increase
than
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then
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 return to the same levels
while
Sydney
start
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 higher and in one period down and return.
Firstly
, as I write above there are
London
 and
New-York
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New York
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 the countries started from January with 5 and 10
than
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slightly
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increase
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increased
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 between seven
month
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months
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 to 30 and 23
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Sydney
decrease
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decreased
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 steadily from 25 to 15. And
than
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 stay same
while
 others fell in December to 5 and 10. By far annual hours of
sunshune
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sunshine
 in
New-York
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New York
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 and
Sydney
twice
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are twice
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 higher
than
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in
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London
while
New-York
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New York
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just
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is just
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 over
the
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apply
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Sydney
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words london, new-york, sydney with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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