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Some people believe that school children should not be given homework by their teachers, whereas others argue that homework plays an important role in the education of children. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

#people #school #children #homework #teachers #role #education
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A very controversial issue today relates to the matter of teachers giving
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 to students and the role it plays in their education. In
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 of view, though I am of the opinion that assignment given to students by tutors goes a long way to better their educational outcome. On the one hand,
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 of homework to pupils play a very important role in educating children because it enables
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, engage their minds and gain a better understanding of the topic taught in class, as
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 they are unlikely to forget
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, my son who immediately carries out all his off-school work once he returns from his institute
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 gains a better understanding of the subject,
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 he has maintained the
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through out
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 his academic year gaining a strong educational background.
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 to be done at home improves the child's
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 skills,
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 with a resultant improved academic performance.
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, some parents believe that children should not carry out
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 exercise as
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 consumes the time necessary for other social activities
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 as football and chess. In their view, school work should not encroach on the time for games.
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, my husband's friend takes his son out every afternoon to play basketball at a time that coincides with that of his
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 task,
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 he fails to practicalize his work and
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 eventually affects his academic outcome. In summary, having the pro's and con's of each view, I believe it's best for students to be given tasks by their lecturers as it improves their
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 and enables them to have a strong educational background.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Instills discipline
  • Deepen understanding
  • Independent learning
  • Reinforcement
  • Parental involvement
  • Curriculum insight
  • Burnout
  • Student stress
  • Leisure time
  • Relevance of assignments
  • Project-based learning
  • Interactive learning
  • Individual learning styles
  • Conducive study environment
  • Homework policy
  • Balanced approach
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