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Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and that money could be better spent elsewhere. To what extend do you agree with this view?

#people #government #money #arts
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 resources of the country have to be invested wisely by the authority.
Howerever
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However
government
 funding perhaps leads to major contradictions.
Such
 as, few people hold an opinion that the
government
 is pooling its
capitals
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 on
the
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artistry, but which could be better funded on other commodities. I disagree with
this
 notion. And, I will recount my
prespective
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perspective
 in
this
 essay. 
Art
 has evidently become a backbone of the countries economical and cultural progress for many years. And yet, many fields of
art
 are not well
previlaged
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privileged
 by the
government
. By providing aides help
in
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entice youngsters to get into the field and would
upholds
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 national values and importance in the worlds
art
faltform
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platform
flatform
.
Nevertheless
, I am not opposing the idea of investing
on
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 other useful developments of the country. I would support
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government
 which has been considerate
on
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of
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 artistry and
it's
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its
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 improvision by providing necessary assistance.  In a
nut shell
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, even though people hold disparity ideas about
government
 providing funding to the development of
art
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the art
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 industry. I would argue that it has to continue. And
also
 it's mandatory to
upbring
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bring
 country's historical value and economical prosperity.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enriching society
  • promoting cultural understanding
  • development of talent
  • creative industries
  • economic benefits
  • generate revenue
  • cultural heritage
  • identity
  • prioritize spending
  • needs of the majority
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