Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and that money could be better spent elsewhere. To what extend do you agree with this view?

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resources of the country have to be invested wisely by the authority.
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funding perhaps leads to major contradictions.
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as, few people hold an opinion that the
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is pooling its
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on
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artistry, but which could be better funded on other commodities. I disagree with
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notion. And, I will recount my
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essay. 
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has evidently become a backbone of the countries economical and cultural progress for many years. And yet, many fields of
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are not well
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privileged
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. By providing aides help
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entice youngsters to get into the field and would
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national values and importance in the worlds
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platform
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, I am not opposing the idea of investing
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other useful developments of the country. I would support
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government
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which has been considerate
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artistry and
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improvision by providing necessary assistance.  In a
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, even though people hold disparity ideas about
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providing funding to the development of
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art
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industry. I would argue that it has to continue. And
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it's mandatory to
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country's historical value and economical prosperity.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enriching society
  • promoting cultural understanding
  • development of talent
  • creative industries
  • economic benefits
  • generate revenue
  • cultural heritage
  • identity
  • prioritize spending
  • needs of the majority
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