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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Some specialists consider that children should learn a foreign
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 at elementary school
instead
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 of secondary school.I totally agree with
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 statement. Learning languages demand a lot of
efforts
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, intelligence and
also
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 patience. When we were
infant
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infants
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, the natural instinct was dominant to us for learning
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 and using it when we are in need.
Young
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A young
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 child's brain is
more fresh
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 and its body is ready to receive new information . At
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 time, the child can easily learn and remember by hearing ,by seeing and
finally
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 by touching. It will be
also
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efficient
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an efficient
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 way if we try to teach the
second
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language
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primary
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 education period. If I come up with an idea to share with you my experience my ability for
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 learning was rather good
by comparison
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 to
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. Even though
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I did not learn by heart at home ,I used to learn by repeating after my teacher ,
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 is
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no
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exaggeration
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 .But I really managed to learn a poem even within five minutes.
Furthermore
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, younger students can take knowledge by watching cartoons and some kind of visual aids.
However
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, one thing should be taken into consideration while dividing the
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 young learners , if so , they might be exhausted , even they may
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loose
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lose
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their
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interest . In order not to do so, children should be taught to
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second
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language
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at
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 maximum age . But , at that time , they might face more difficulties despite
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being older .
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 , they would already get used to speaking their own
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 .
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 barrier might be
problem
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a problem
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. In conclusion,In spite of being aware of some benefits of learning a new
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 at secondary school , I still agree that they should learn a
language
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 as much early as possible .

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