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With all the problems in the world today, spending money on space exploration is a complete waste. The money could be better spent on other causes.

#world #money #space #exploration #waste
Whether is it necessary to invest in
space
 expedition or not divides people into two. There are some people who think that the research is
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 of money, and the amount could be better used to develop other areas of society. To a large extent, I disagree with the statement since outer
space
studies
 have made many positive changes in the day-to-day life of mankind. Admittedly, when the entire world invests
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exorbitant money on researching outer
space
, it seems to be unnecessary for many.
This
 is because
they
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 hardly aware
about
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 its benefits. Those opposing probably consider the fund could be better utilized for the construction of public infrastructures.
However
,
for example
, digital imaging was actually formulated to
analise
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analyse
 satellite images of the moon. Eventually, the same
technique
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 incorporated in the medical field;
therefore
, it is clear that many technologies we use today
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 originally developed for
space
 excavation. Despite the above-mentioned view, by conducting
space
studies
,
human
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 population has been benefited.
Firstly
,
the
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fast-paced communication is only possible
as
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 the presence of
satellite
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 on the orbits. If the USA did not allocate
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 to develop
this
, mankind would not have facilities,
for instance
, the internet and online services.
Similarly
, the
studies
 may assist to find another planet, where humans could settle and escape from extreme climates and pollutants.
Thus
, the advantages of
space
studies
 are so evident. In conclusion, even though some people are sceptical about squandering money on
space
 research, I strongly think that it has been bringing more merits than negligible demerits to the world.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • space exploration
  • technological advancements
  • resource acquisition
  • inspire
  • funding allocations
  • global challenges
  • poverty alleviation
  • healthcare infrastructure
  • educational reform
  • long-term investments
  • economic growth
  • sustainable development
  • societal benefits
  • budgetary priorities
  • space industry
  • fiscal responsibility
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