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Some people believe if a police force carries guns, it will encourage the level of violence in the society. To what extent you agree or disagree?

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The key role of the
police
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 is to curb crime and reduce instances of
violence
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. It is believed that the
police
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 equipped with weapons is likely to contribute to more
violence
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.
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, I disagree with
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 opinion as I think
this
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 phenomenon will alleviate
violence
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 in our society.
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, it will reduce lawlessness. Some people commit
crimes
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 because they think
police
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 do not have threats to them.
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, if
police
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 can carry guns, those who are on the edge of
crimes
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 or
violence
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 will consider the consequence and know
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 misbehaviours like bullying and robbery are definitely not be allowed. More importantly, they will realize it is difficult for them to commit
crimes
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, which could have a deterrent effect on using
violence
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 and commit
crimes
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, improving the safety of our society.
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,
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 could alleviate violent cases and maintain stability. Another benefit is that it is useful for the force to arrest someone who poses a series of dangers to the public. It is common to see that lots of offenders who haven’t been put into prison are one of the causes of our society’s disorder.
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, If the guards could use guns when they are arresting those offenders, they can shoot those who are escaping, which will ensure the success of catching culprits, let them be punished.
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, the number of people who intends to use
violence
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 will get arrested and be put behind the bars, contributing to a safe world. In conclusion, the
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 using weapons could curb
violence
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 because it could deter people from violating the law and reduce criminals escaping from the arrest.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • law enforcement
  • escalate
  • deter
  • overreaction
  • perceived safety
  • misuse of power
  • deterrent effect
  • law and order
  • public safety
  • crime prevention
  • civil liberties
  • use of lethal force
  • accountability
  • arms race
  • militarization
  • social fabric
  • statistical evidence
  • cultural attitudes
  • criminal behavior
  • policy implications
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