There have been some problems with the bus service, especially its reliability, in your area over the last two weeks. Write a letter to the manager of the bus company. In your letter • describe what the problems are • explain how these problems are affecting you • suggest what you would like the company to do You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear ...........,

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Dear Mr Smith, I am writing regarding your company’s bus service, which has been unreliable in the North Somerset area over the
last
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two weeks. There are several issues with the service that I have encountered.
Firstly
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, on several
occasions
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the bus was already full when it arrived at the Nailsea bus stop.
As a result
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, the driver did not stop.
Secondly
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, buses are often late, arriving up to 10 minutes behind schedule.
As a result
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, I have missed several job-related appointments.
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, I have had to take taxis to attend meetings, which has resulted in additional expenses. I hope that your company will take appropriate measures to resolve
this
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issue. I would suggest adding a few more buses to the routes in the North Somerset area. If necessary, I would be happy to provide
further
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details about the specific services that were delayed. Best regards, Taras

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task response
For task response: add one more clear detail about the bus times or days. This can make your points stronger.
task response
For task response: in the last part, say more clearly what action you want, for example more buses at busy times.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: your ideas are clear, but you can link them with one more word like 'also' or 'because' in one place.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: the letter is well split into parts, but one short ending line could make it feel more complete.
task response
For task response: you answer all parts of the task.
task response
For task response: the tone is polite and right for a letter to a manager.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: the letter has a clear start, middle, and end.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: each paragraph has one main idea, so it is easy to follow.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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