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Many countries face the problem of low voter turnout in their democratic elections. What are the problems associated with it and suggest solutions?

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In the past two ,year there have been fewer
people
 participating in the
elections
 around the world. One cause could be the pandemic of covid-19 that left hundreds of deaths. The pandemic has cost the lives of many
people
, which could be one of the problems why democratic
elections
 count with a low rate of voters. Another problem related to the pandemic could be the fear of the
people
 contracting
this
 disease and being around another person. They prefer not to go to the
elections
 in order to be safe in their home. The problems associated with those few
people
 choosing the president of the country made it cost that the majority of the population are not represented and
that is
 a big issue
,
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 because it would make a lot of
people
 angry and left out by their side. One solution could be more protocols of safeties in order to combat the covid-19 ,
for example
, mask, alcohol, hand sanitiser, among others and
also
 restrictions for the population,
such
 as the distancing required. Another solution could be more participation of the politicians in the lives of the
people
,
for example
 doing meetings about a problem in their society, marching for the gender violence in order to generate participation of the public in the
elections
. To conclude, while there are some problems with the low rate of participation in democratic
elections
, if the populations and the politicians make some changes for the safety and the good of the
people
, the rate can go higher.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Voter turnout
  • Legitimacy
  • Disproportionate representation
  • Voter apathy
  • Enfranchisement
  • Disenfranchisement
  • Electoral reforms
  • Compulsory voting
  • Voter registration
  • Engagement
  • Political campaigns
  • Media coverage
  • Electronic/online voting
  • Socioeconomic barriers
  • Election Day
  • Public trust
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