Companies spend millions each year on advertising online, in magazines and billboards.These adverts can encourage people to buy products that they do not really need? What are the positive and negative effects of consumerism?

The main goal of
advertisement
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is to increase
selling
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of a distinct
product
. As
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as
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result of
such
marketing politics, people acquire more
goods
, than
it
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is necessary. So there can be various opinions on
this
theme regarding
to
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your own purpose to sell or to buy a
product
. Owing to
main
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aim of every corporation to sell something, the development of advertising is being very beneficial
last
years. Professionals show us
goods
from the
favorable
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side and demonstrate us non-evident advantages of buying just
this
moment. Essentially, that the fact, that consumers buy widely advertised clothes and food more frequently, stems from professional promotion. According to having
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variety of proposed
goods
,
a
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customers are able to purchase
more
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a more
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beneficial and convenient
product
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products
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or
service
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. Sometimes it can be ground for overconsumption.
However
,
such
great advertisement politics allows
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just required dress,
for instance
, without needless doubts and
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. Though a person can save time and money relying on recommendations and slogans. It can
also
reduce the pace of buying in the world by offering the most appropriate items in targeted advertising,
for example
. What is more, online services have been helping to avoid more intensive dissemination of COVID-19 by providing an opportunity to satisfy all needs being under quarantine.
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, I would like to emphasize, that every person (or corporation) has
its
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own desires and
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in the process of trading. PR-consultants strive to make their
product
wishful for shoppers simultaneously with consumer’s desire to acquire
goods
cheaper. So,
personally
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I suppose, that
advertisement
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maintain a balance between producing and consuming items.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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