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Nowadays, child labor has become a major concern. why it is so? What can be done to solve this problem?

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Child labour refers to
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adolescent
 working in factories at small age which is a big issue these days.
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 may happen due to a lot of reasons which we will discuss in the essay and
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, provide relevant solutions to decrease these kinds of problems.
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, inflation is the most important cause in some countries as people are not able to meet their necessary needs.
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, all the family members have to work including adults, because one person does not earn enough to feed
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, most cases are seen in India, the reason is poverty where salaries are small and prices of the items are at peak.
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, there are some families like single mothers, disabled, an orphan etc. who do not have any other way left
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 engaging their kids to work to shoulder the burden of the house. To resolve
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 scenario, the one possible fix can be if the cost of education cut off to half which is extremely high to
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, each student will get an opportunity to get knowledge and achieve
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 they set.
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, a law needs to be implemented on the employers who take part in
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 activities and should be punished. Enough funds should be given by the system to support poor people so, that youngsters can attend their schools rather than doing labour. More literate graduates will add to the economic growth of the country. Overall, as stated above, working at
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 age is not a choice but helplessness. There are various other actions that an administration can take to prevent young child crimes. Apart from that, the public must choose their authorities keeping in mind, the future of their children.
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