Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Numerous ways have
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introduced in
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century where people can watch
movies
according to their choice and
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convenience
confidence
. Few of them believe in watching
movies
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or i-pads while some prefer to go to multiplexes.The following essay throws light on both opinions.
Firstly
, watching over the phones can be very comfortable as folks can watch at their homes where they can be seated anywhere and in any position which
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best for them.
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while watching and can resume their films whenever they want.
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movies
over the
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can be very cost-effective.Netflixes and
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are
such
platforms that provide
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a variety
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of options for all age groups and in very less amount. Cartoon
movies
are
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On the other hand
, people like to go to cinemas so they can enjoy watching on the big screen.Horror and 3-D
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are best when watched in the halls so that
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can enjoy the picture quality and the sound on the speakers.
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of
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advertisements
while watching over the phone which is not the case in the halls.Few people love to watch
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show of any
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film
when released. Overall, the way of watching
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completely depends on
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's choice but I think
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cinemas
are best so as to have
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full
access to sound and picture quality.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Convenience
  • Mobile Viewing
  • Cost-efficient
  • Time-efficient
  • Personalized experience
  • Immersive
  • Cinematic experience
  • Surround sound
  • Collective experience
  • Technical superiority
  • Sensory experience
  • Social hubs
  • Cultural events
  • Distractions
  • Preservation
  • Filmmaking art
  • Cinematographic nuances
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