Some people work for the same organisation all their working life. Others think it is better to work for different organisations

The issue has been widely discussed for decades. Some may say that staying at the company is
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choice,
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those who believe switching for
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organisations is even better. In
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paragraphs, I will exam
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both ideas before I offering my own viewpoint.
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, there are many causes of the consequence of keeping to work for the same organisation. The most important one among them is promotion and salary. Generally speaking, You would get more opportunities for stepping up, the longer you stay in a company
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so that your
life
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quality
will be protected. No mention that you may earn more pension when you are tired in the future.
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, lots of people always spend their whole
life
staying in Japan company for the same working culture which is
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illustrated
above. Furthertheless, some people suppose that staying in the same place for a long time is risky especially for
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the young
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man
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. Freshman should take chance to learn more by changing working place like a
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sponge
. It helps to prepare themselves to confront the
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difficulties
and to experience the
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life
. Leaving for a better
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company
will give you
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to push you improved. It broadens your view if you get
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to
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the chance working in different countries. To sum up, staying in the same job would bring you stable
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to change occupies to contact various interesting staff. I firmly believe that learning is the key way to contain a wonderful
life
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  • Corporate ladder
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  • Professional network
  • Diverse skill set
  • Industry exposure
  • Innovation
  • Resilience
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  • Job market
  • Career trajectory
  • Company culture
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  • Job security
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