Many people assume that the goal of every country should be to produce more materials and goods. To what extent do you agree that constantly increasing production is an appropriate goal?

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It is widely agreed that nations should aim to manufacture a greater amount of materials and goods. From my perspective,
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production is a prudent target, there should be a limit on the speed of goods being produced. Nowadays, many countries are longing for a better capability to create goods, since
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is advantageous for the prosperity of the country. By producing a large
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, it creates a considerable turnover for the economy. Productions might be sold to consumers from all around the world. If nations can export a large
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, they are likely to receive a high revenue, which contributes to the affluence of the nation. To illustrate, the current economic potential of Japan depends on its strength to export transport equipment, domestic
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should be produced at a proper pace in order to mitigate some prominent risks. If the authority requires a company to continually grow the
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, the quality might not be guaranteed.
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, the
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workers have to fight against time to
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the large order from the authority.
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, customers may squander money for low-quality
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and the company may lose its reputation in the not distant future.
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, the environment will be put in the face of danger due to problems of higher demand for spaces and air pollution. Because available lands are in shortage, many people might have a tendency to raze forests and replace forests with factories or intensive farms and these constructions are likely to emit contaminants that spoil the air quality.
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might lead to a big concern that countries want to avoid. To draw a conclusion, I agree that the target to produce more is advantageous for the economy, but the government had better take the speed of manufacturing into careful consideration.
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