“Prevention is better than cure”. Researching and treating diseases is too costly so it would be better to invest in preventative measures. To what extent do you agree?

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strongly agree with. it is better to spend resources on preventive tactics than on research and treating diseases.
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strongly concur with
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health condition to gain proper
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it must go through several processes which is time-consuming and
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the present pandemic which is ravaging the world today has taken several months of study and findings to come up with a verified treatment that can be given to people. More so, it proves the point that because of the cost in time involved it is much better to take proactive
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will need to state that the financial impact involved in coming up with a solution to a disease,
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is more impacting and will demand billion to be set
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and can only be done by governments of Nations.
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for COVID19 is the government of several countries with the United States of America leading
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for prevention as a more suitable action which is
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and require less intervention of political persons. In conclusion,
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strongly agree with the view
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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