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Some people think it is better for children to grow up in the city, while others think that life in the countryside is most suitable. what are the advantages and disadvantages of both places?

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Nowadays parents have started to give Prime importance to the way they are raising their offspring in order to give them a better tomorrow.
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, society has different opinions on where a child should be raised. Few people believe that kids who brought up in the cities will have an improved quality of growth whereas others opine that it will be much better in the countryside.
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 essay intends to discuss the positives and negatives of both sides. Even in
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 21st century-the era of modern technologies, people want to raise their offspring in the village as they have some reasonable grounds. As a person who is born and brought up in a village, I am clearly aware of the advantages and disadvantages.
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, the countryside is blessed with eye-catching greenery  compared to the concrete jungles in the City.
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, people in the rural region are least bothered about pollution and traffic blocks which contribute to the healthy development of children as they are free from deadly diseases due to pollutants and ear-aching noises from the vehicles.
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,youngsters who are being raised in the countryside will tend to have a great piece of knowledge on tradition and culture and will
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 be a master when it comes to maintaining the warmth of relationship. While considering the life in cities it
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 has many positive aspects
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 as easy access to any place nearby with the help of widespread  transport facilities and has more to offer when it comes to advanced health-care facilities.
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, even if the child is caught by any deadly disease the sophisticated health care system in the towns has every treatment to offer in order to save the child's life. At the same time, the towns are considered the education hub and it helps in the better education of the children who live there with higher career opportunities. As every story has two sides, both these places have their own negatives too. On the one hand, the village lacks advancement in the field of technology, health and education.
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, the city has to offer more pollution, diseases and decreased sense of belonging To conclude, even though both the places have pros and cons, the pros outweigh the cons and it is the onus of the parents to help their kids to be a better human being despite where he or she has brought up
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