Some people think that it is important to use leisure time for activities that improve the mind, such as reading and doing word puzzles. Other people feel that it is important to rest the mind during leisure time. Discuss two views and give your opinion.
In today's busy world free
time
plays a vital role to relax themselves
or find the Remove the pronoun
apply
time
to do something which makes them more productive. While few folks believe utilizing leisure time
for hobbies such
as reading, writing and solving word scrambles is fine, whereas many others believe it is the time
for complete relaxation of both mind and body. In this
essay
I will be discussing both views stating my opinion at the end.
On one hand, reading, writing and other Add a comma
,essay
such
activities
can greatly contribute to stressing of brain
, albeit, Add an article
the brain
its
not the case with everyone. It completely depends on how Replace the word
it's
it is
people
take it, as many people
find it stressing
for them whereas, for Replace the word
stressful
others
it is Add a comma
,others
enjoyment
and help in refreshing themselves. Replace the word
enjoyable
In contrast
, to the the
previous Remove the redundancy
apply
time
when parents use to buy educational toys, children use to find studies more enjoyable and practical when compared to now where children are just behind of gadgets in their leisure time
. The activities
which burdens
a human's mind is what they do not like or feel bore in performing the particular task.
Change the verb form
burden
On the other hand
, if reading, writing and playing word games can be fun if played with partners, it can be a source of enjoyment rather than stressing our minds. Nowadays, the moment people
are free from their work they use their mobiles or laptops which is more strenuous to mind and body. For instance
, some people
find going through stories or novels at Correct your spelling
bedtime
bed
Correct your spelling
bedtime
time
more peaceful, helping them to fall asleep easily. Moreover
, children should be encouraged playing
with educational toys or doing Change the verb form
to play
sport
Change the noun form
sports
activities
in their pastime
as it is more beneficial rather than just getting stuck to video games or watching television thinking Fix the agreement mistake
pastimes
its
their entertainment Replace the word
it's
it is
time
.
To conclude, all the activities
do not mean same
to every individual. It is how the individual Correct article usage
the same
take
it and how far they are comfortable in doing so. According to Change the verb form
takes
me
, many folks find pleasure in reading, writing and studying literature in their vocational Correct pronoun usage
my
time
and it is absolutely fine Correct your spelling
if
it
they are relishing themselves in doing so.Correct your spelling
if
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite