Some people think that it is important to use leisure time for activities that improve the mind, such as reading and doing word puzzles. Other people feel that it is important to rest the mind during leisure time. Discuss two views and give your opinion.

In today's busy world free
time
plays a vital role to relax
themselves
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or find the
time
to do something which makes them more productive. While few folks believe utilizing leisure
time
for hobbies
such
as reading, writing and solving word scrambles is fine, whereas many others believe it is the
time
for complete relaxation of both mind and body. In
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I will be discussing both views stating my opinion at the end. On one hand, reading, writing and other
such
activities
can greatly contribute to stressing of
brain
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, albeit,
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not the case with everyone. It completely depends on how
people
take it, as many
people
find it
stressing
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for them whereas, for
others
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it is
enjoyment
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and help in refreshing themselves.
In contrast
, to the
the
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previous
time
when parents use to buy educational toys, children use to find studies more enjoyable and practical when compared to now where children are just behind of gadgets in their leisure
time
. The
activities
which
burdens
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a human's mind is what they do not like or feel bore in performing the particular task.
On the other hand
, if reading, writing and playing word games can be fun if played with partners, it can be a source of enjoyment rather than stressing our minds. Nowadays, the moment
people
are free from their work they use their mobiles or laptops which is more strenuous to mind and body.
For instance
, some
people
find going through stories or novels at
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bed
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time
more peaceful, helping them to fall asleep easily.
Moreover
, children should be encouraged
playing
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with educational toys or doing
sport
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activities
in their
pastime
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as it is more beneficial rather than just getting stuck to video games or watching television thinking
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their entertainment
time
. To conclude, all the
activities
do not mean
same
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to every individual. It is how the individual
take
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it and how far they are comfortable in doing so. According to
me
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, many folks find pleasure in reading, writing and studying literature in their vocational
time
and it is absolutely fine
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it
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they are relishing themselves in doing so.
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