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In many modern socities grandchildren rarely spend any quality time with their grandparents. what do you think are the consequences of this?

The relationship between
grandparents
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 and grandchildren
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 always explained beautifully in
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kids'
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 storybooks.
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,in
this
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 contemporary era,children often don't get time to spend with their
grandparents
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and
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it
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 results in a couple of negative impacts. The first and
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major reason for the separation of these two generations
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 the increasing favour of the nuclear family.
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,they end up spending no valuable time together.
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, it affects our youngsters in many negative ways
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such
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 as loss of warmth in the relationship
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 they are left alone in the home when their parents go to work
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 nobody is there to take care of them.
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, it develops a rebel attitude towards everyone and everything and ends up being an introverted person.
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, if
grandparents
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 are there to take care of the children in the absence of parents, it will develop a sense of belonging.
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, if the old and the new generations are not spending quality time together,it will generate misperceptions among both groups regarding their way of life. The second important consequence can affect any Nation as a whole. Because
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the less the relationship between
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the
generation
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generations
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the
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, the
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 less the inheritance of tradition and culture.
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, India is a country blessed with great traditions and cultural activities. But today's generation is
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 aware of
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 importance
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it
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. A survey conducted in 2018 has shown that youngsters who stay with their
grandparents
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 have greater knowledge about the important dates of festivals and traditional practices
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,
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etc. At the same
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while
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time
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, we have a great source of art forms 
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 a higher number of them are on the verge of extinction as they were not passed from ancestors to the current youngsters.
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, if
this
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 problem is not addressed with the importance it deserves, it can have a huge negative impact
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 is capable of destroying our year-old values
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 our younger ones will forget to respect elders. The onus is on the father and mother to ensure that their parents and offspring are constantly
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in touch with each other.
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, the importation of youth being raised with
grandparents
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 will have a colossal effect on society in a very positive way

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grammar
Fix grammar mistakes and how words link. For example, 'were' should be 'was'.
structure
Make a small plan before you write: say the problem, then two or three effects, then a short plan for how to fix it.
structure
Use one idea in each paragraph. Start with a simple sentence that shows the main idea, then add one point.
coherence
Keep ideas easy to link. Use words like 'also', 'but', 'and' to join ideas.
evidence
Try to use true facts. If you say a study, name it or do not use it.
editing
Check spelling, spaces after periods, and capital letters.
task response
The writer shows a clear view that time with grandparents matters.
coherence
There are two main ideas, with some examples.
Your opinion

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