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Students are becoming more and more reliant on the Internet. While the Internet is convenient, it has many negative effects and its use for educational purposes should be restricted. How far do you agree with this statement?

#students #internet #effects #purposes
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Currently, the usage of the
internet
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people’s life. It is considered that the
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positive effects on
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negative effects on them. From my perspective, I believe that the
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disadvantage
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. I support
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 view and my reasons will be explained in the following paragraphs. On the one hand, it is commonly believed that there are several benefits of using the
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internet
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 technology provides useful resources of valuable information to
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, students able to find materials of learning from several websites to support their research.
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 of that, it keeps teachers and
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connect
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 other by using social applications which is helps them to submit their projects.
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, the school can post any school news on the
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 and makes different social activities to attract much more students.
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, all these website activities on the
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their concentration when they are studying on it.
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, they will face many advertisements that will make them not focus on their task.
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 to get ready assignments or by taking from others without work on it by their mind skills. To conclude, after analyzing both sides of the arguments it is not hard to see that, consuming
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use the
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • independent learning
  • critical thinking
  • excessive reliance
  • hinder
  • crucial
  • problem-solving
  • overly dependent
  • diversity
  • perspectives
  • global cultures
  • enriching
  • unrestricted
  • information overload
  • discerning
  • credible sources
  • incorporation
  • engagement
  • adaptivity
  • personalized learning
  • innovative
  • pedagogy
  • digital age
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