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In many countries, the government prioritises economic growth above all other concerns. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages and give your own opinion.

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Finance plays an important role to develop all the sectors for
overall
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the overall
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growth
 of the
nation
. The
government
 keeps economic
growth
 ahead of
rest
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the rest
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 of
areas
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the areas
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 in the majority of nations. There are certain benefits and drawbacks of
this
 concept which will be discussed in
this
 essay, with the conclusion of my opinion. On one hand, there are a plethora of advantages of keeping economic
growth
, the main concern by the union bodies.
Firstly
, to develop
any
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 area of the country, money forms the basic requirement.
For instance
, to develop
health
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the health
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 sector, a huge sum of money is required to invest
for
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 medical equipment, building decent infrastructure and hiring medical professionals.
Thus
, if
economy
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 of a
nation
 is strong it can be achieved easily.
Secondly
, if the financial
growth
 of a
nation
 is optimum, it need not take funds from other countries and folks need not migrate to other parts of
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 in search better career or lifestyle.
Thirdly
. if the
government
 focus on economic
growth
, they can invest liberally in
education
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the education
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 field, thereby, increasing the literacy rate ultimately contributing to
growth
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the growth
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 of the
nation
.
On the other hand
, there are quite drawbacks of just focusing on economical
growth
 while neglecting the basic requirements of the population.
Firstly
, to make the monetary system strong, the
government
 invest huge capital on big projects,
hence
, ignoring the essential needs of poor people
such
 as food and shelter.
Secondly
. to make
economy
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 sturdy, the
government
 impose heavy taxes on
public
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the public
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 which sometimes become impossible for the common citizen to pay and in turn do not get
much
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 facilities as expected.
Thirdly
, to stabilize
country's
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 budget, prices of essentials are increased especially on staple food items which ultimately cause great inconvenience to their own citizens. To recapitulate, there are "two sides of each coin" and
government
 should take the decisions wisely. According to
me
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,
economic
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the economic
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growth
 of the
nation
 is vital for the overall development, albeit, the decisions of the legal bodies should not negatively impact their citizens or residents.
Moreover
, every
nation
 should make an effort to keep their people happy and satisfied with their elected governors.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic growth
  • quality of life
  • standard of living
  • infrastructure development
  • employment opportunities
  • environmental impact
  • wealth disparity
  • modernization
  • sustainable development
  • Gross Domestic Product (GDP)
  • industrialization
  • ecological footprint
  • capital investment
  • urbanization
  • economic prosperity
  • fiscal policy
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